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Postby HeartOfDarkness » Tue May 06, 2008 12:29 pm

I died in peace, but I was scarce
Ajusted to the tomb,
When some dude died for glory that
Preceded a huge 'BOOM'.
He sat up and said "That was fun!"
I think I'll try again!
For evidently, warfare is
A thing that death can't end.
He was plucked out and tossed aside,
His legs were roughly ripped
From his torso, in order that
A friend could be equipped
With pants that matched the color of
The hat upon his head.
And since their colors weren't the same,
His friend then shot him dead.
I thought "That looks so cool! Why should
That dude get all the fun!"
And so I hopped out of my tomb
And went to find a gun.

There you have it. Completely on the spur of the moment, too.
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Postby Shaeph » Tue May 06, 2008 4:18 pm

wow nice poem benny

Heart, nice writing but, is it a poem?????
it does kind of rhyme, sometimes
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Postby Rody » Tue May 06, 2008 4:22 pm

it's a poem that only rhymes when it feels like it.
Act first, then think, then try to find a way to cover up the horrible mess you made.
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Postby IVhorseman » Tue May 06, 2008 4:28 pm

Free verse kicks ass.
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Postby Blitzen » Tue May 06, 2008 4:36 pm

It has a rhyme scheme of

A
B
C
B

Awesome.
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Postby Captain Nomouth » Tue May 06, 2008 7:48 pm

Has anyone heard this one?


There once was a ninja from Nantucket,
who kept all his swords in a bucket.
He started to spin,
and exclaimed with a grin:
"When I let this thing go you best duck it."
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Postby Blitzen » Tue May 06, 2008 8:01 pm

'you best'? I don't think that's proper ninja tongue.
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Postby IVhorseman » Tue May 06, 2008 9:11 pm

nor is it proper rhyme or meter for a limerick.

i have an AP lit test thursday. i'm allowed to be a snob on poetry. at least till then, then screw it.
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Postby Blitzen » Wed May 07, 2008 2:32 pm

So when's your tank test coming up? I want to make a heavy assault gun and stick a pretty tank name on it.
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Postby IVhorseman » Wed May 07, 2008 5:06 pm

EVERY day is tank test day.
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