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by **Falk** » Mon Oct 31, 2011 9:07 am

This is a story involving my faction. Don't have a name or background story yet, but I'm working on it.
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On a shuttle, en route to a secret mountain lab
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Capt. Joe Jones: "Okay boys, listen up. We're heading to a secret peach lab located in this mountain."
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"The lab is guarded by a heavy cannon and two flak cannons above the door. It contains some sort of weapon and command wants us to get it."
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"We'll land on this landing pad, where we need to take out all the guards and the comm antenna."
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"This building is our target and is the entrance to the lab."
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Copilot: "Sir, we're the LZ is coming up."
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Capt. Jones: "Alright boys, get your buckets on."
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Pilot: "This is supply shuttle NTV5467 requesting permission to land."
Flight control: "Shuttle NTV5467, you have permission to land."
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The shuttle lands and it's doors open...
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And a trooper with a minigun runs out and kills one of the guards.
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He tries to kill a gunner, but his gun blows up...
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Still killing the gunner.
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The mini gunner goes for the gunner's blaster.
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As another trooper (the officer) blasts two peaches with his assyrian bolter.
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A trooper with a rocket launcher fires a rocket,
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Which detonates on the comm tower, destroying it.
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A sniper follows him out, shooting the other guard in the process.
A trooper with a flamer jumps out and flames the last peach on the wall.
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Two commandos in blue armor come out of the shuttle, and shoot
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A peach trooper and a gunner.
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The captain takes to the skies, shooting his rifle and downing another peach trooper.
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He lands next to the group of pilots and decapitates one.
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A hatch opens on the shuttle, revealing a laser cannon, which destroys the AA machine gun.
PEACHES
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The machine gunner in the tower opens fire, but misses.
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A peach trooper and the peach commander fire on the captain, killing him.
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A peach guard shoots the officer in the helmet, killing him.
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The others mover up.
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The peach pilot tried to fire on the shuttle, but his cannon blew up.
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COMMANDOS
The shuttle started taking off while the flamer clone killer the peach commander and the clone with the rocket launcher fired a missile
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Which detonated in the tower, killing the two peaches in it.
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A missile lunched off the shuttle's roof
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And killed the remining peach troopers.
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The last peach was killed by the shuttle's cannon.
PEACHES ELIMINATED
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A medic jumped out of the shuttle as it took off,
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And proceeded to rebuild all the dead troopers.

THE END

by **Swordsalmon** » Mon Oct 31, 2011 11:43 am

Off to reviewing "Operation Beach Head"!

Gameplay: The game looked good, but it looked a bit to imbalanced in favor of the Yellows. 3
Photography: A couple pictures were blurry, but most of them look just fine. 3
Violence: Nice and violent, especially once the Peaches counter-attack. Lots of detached minifigs and red bricks! 4
Writing: I liked the scenario, and was written pretty decently. The opening pictures added a bit more story appeal. Good job! 4
Overall Appeal: I liked this report quite a bit. The battlefield and creations are solid, and the battle became engaging. I would have liked to see more customization in your armies, though. Overall, a good report!

Overall Score: 3/5 (Average of all scores, rounded)

by **piltogg** » Mon Oct 31, 2011 9:05 pm

Gameplay: It was pretty nice. There could have been more complicated objectives,but it was pretty standard.  3

Photography: These were good.   4

Violence: Plenty. 4.

Writing: coulda used a bit more. 3.

Overall Appeal: I really liked the way you set this up. This was one of the more interesting battle reports i have seen for quite a while.  5.

Overall Score: 3.8

by **Silverdream** » Mon Oct 31, 2011 9:26 pm

Gameplay: Pretty darn good. Massacres are always fun, but I sensed that it was pretty equal for both sides. 5.

Photography: Clear, and I admire the use of micro for the mountain. 5.

Violence: Tolerable, and pretty good amount of explosions and gore. 4.

Writing: Not a proper ending. 2.5

Overall Appeal: Pretty fun to read, but whether it was the peach racism or lack of ending I felt like this was missing something.
Overall Score: 3.5

by **Ross_Varn** » Mon Oct 31, 2011 10:09 pm

12 again. Hmm.

by **Falk** » Tue Nov 01, 2011 10:42 am

Thanks everyone for the ratings and comments.

@Swordsalmon: the reason it was so one sided was that the clone troopers went first, and they had better weaponry, so they managed to take out most of the peaches in one turn (the peaches rolls also sucked)

@ Silverdream: the story has more parts, but I haven't gotten around to posting/making them, so that's why it seemed like there wasn't an ending.

Again, thanks for the scoring and comments.

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