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[HH] Raid on Outpost Zeta [Turn 1-4] FINISHED 11/4/2018
Posted: Wed Oct 17, 2018 1:45 pm
by DayBoost_
I had mistakenly put turn 0 in Forum battles. Sorry, no sign ups
you can view that here:
http://brikwars.com/forums/viewtopic.php?f=16&t=17333
Pirates
The pirates arrive at the outpost.
Pirate Captain: You have about a minute before the guard comes back from his break to plant the bomb.

The troops hop off the ship
Guard on break

One of the pirates runs up and plants the bomb

He flips the switch and runs out of the way
BOOM

The robot awakens from its charge dock, sound the alert sound

Sniper hears this and runs back into his nest, but one of the pirates tossed a bomb into his path. it was too late

The bomb explodes, decapitating the sniper

The troops start to head towards their battle stations
Crimson: I need this ship ready to go now! One of you needs to get in a tank and handle this!
turns should come more steadily from here on out, Ill aim for daily or every other.
Re: Raid on Outpost Zeta [Turn 1]
Posted: Wed Oct 17, 2018 5:44 pm
by AZKAMAT
Is this for HH?
Re: Raid on Outpost Zeta [Turn 1]
Posted: Wed Oct 17, 2018 9:28 pm
by DayBoost_
AZKAMAT wrote:Is this for HH?
no but I may aswell put it in
Re: Raid on Outpost Zeta [Turn 1]
Posted: Thu Oct 18, 2018 8:02 pm
by DayBoost_
The tank pilot starts heading towards one of the tanks with a trooper for cover

but the guard gets shot down

but the driver is able to make it into the tank

They manage to open the door back in the control room, but by doing this the door is stuck from the shrapnel

the tank takes aim, and just as its about to fire, a pirate tosses a bomb right into its barrel
BOOM

the pirates start closing in

the infantry also heads in

one of the soldiers gets a shot on a pirate

but then they gang up and blow his head off
Crimson: you need to hold off the pirates until we can launch this ship!
the other technician is hard at work on the ship

"High command, this is unit 3375, Zeta base is under attack, repeat under attack"

Re: Raid on Outpost Zeta [Turn 1]
Posted: Fri Oct 26, 2018 5:28 pm
by AZKAMAT
DayBoost_ wrote:AZKAMAT wrote:Is this for HH?
no but I may aswell put it in
Then put [HH] in the title ASAP so I and the other judges do not lose it in the masses.
Re: Raid on Outpost Zeta [Turn 1]
Posted: Fri Oct 26, 2018 10:30 pm
by Zupponn
AZKAMAT wrote:DayBoost_ wrote:AZKAMAT wrote:Is this for HH?
no but I may aswell put it in
Then put [HH] in the title ASAP so I and the other judges do not lose it in the masses.
Yep. If there is no [HH] tag, I don't put it into the HH thread and then it won't count.
Re: Raid on Outpost Zeta [Turn 1&2] Update
Posted: Sun Oct 28, 2018 11:43 am
by DayBoost_
not finished just yet
thought the battle had to be finished
Re: Raid on Outpost Zeta [Turn 1&2] Update
Posted: Mon Oct 29, 2018 7:25 pm
by Zupponn
DayBoost_ wrote:not finished just yet
thought the battle had to be finished
Then make sure it's finished by the time submissions close.
Re: [HH] Raid on Outpost Zeta [Turn 1&2] Update
Posted: Mon Oct 29, 2018 9:01 pm
by DayBoost_
TURN 3
Everybody starts to run towards the hallway, including the base members

The pirates get a kill

One of the pirates heads off towards the second mini tank, while the other 2 continue to head through. One of them picks up a dead soldier to use as a meat shield

The one pirate begins driving out the tank

The Pirate's ship reappears

and they begin to head out

the 2 pirates still on the ground venture further down the hallway, and are able to block shots with the meat shield and get a kill

they throw down the meat shield, shocking the last troop, and get the kill

the robot must enter it's defense form
MACHINE GUN HANDS

the pirates unknowingly walk into the death trap

and he is torn to shreds
sorry for how late this is
Re: [HH] Raid on Outpost Zeta [Turn 1&2] Update
Posted: Sat Nov 03, 2018 9:09 am
by AZKAMAT
DayBoost_ wrote:sorry for how late this is
Shush and keep uploading! Gogogo! Today's the day!!!!
Re: [HH] Raid on Outpost Zeta [Turn 1-3] Update 10/29/2018
Posted: Sun Nov 04, 2018 8:41 pm
by DayBoost_
The robot starts to head for the Pilots Quarters but in doing this it opens him up to the unseen pirate

Coolant everywhere
Crimson: defend the ship, C'mon theres only one left and you're highly trained!

Crimson starts to hop in his ship

the technician is easily flattened

Crimson blows out the hangar door, and starts the ship. The pirate tries to do damage, but the shots only do minimal damage

the pirate finishes his objective by stealing all the system files

the Pirates pull into the Pilot Quarters to pick up the surviving pirate
END
super apologies for missing HH deadline, this was slated for yesterday but an emergency arose and that took precedence
hope you enjoyed my first try at a small scale battle!

Re: [HH] Raid on Outpost Zeta [Turn 1-4] FINISHED 11/4/2018
Posted: Wed Nov 07, 2018 4:49 pm
by ninja_bait
gameplay 4
photography 4
violence 4
writing 4
appeal 5
is this a forum battle? if so, where do i sign up?
Re: [HH] Raid on Outpost Zeta [Turn 1-4] FINISHED 11/4/2018
Posted: Sat Nov 17, 2018 11:04 am
by AZKAMAT
-Gameplay 3
-Photography 3.6 (It was bad at first but somehow it improved a lot later on in the set.)
-Violence 5 (All deaths executed to satisfaction)
-Writing 4.25 (Good clarity of what's going on but the story of the battle is a bit bland and you have minor spelling/grammar errors. Everyone does those, including me, but if someone goes to the effort to scan their every word and fix them all then IMO that's a pre-requisite for a potential perfect score)
-Overall Appeal 3.5
TOTAL: 3.87
Re: [HH] Raid on Outpost Zeta [Turn 1-4] FINISHED 11/4/2018
Posted: Sat Nov 17, 2018 2:09 pm
by Darkstorm
whoops my bad for the late judging
I give this a solid 4 in all categories except violence, that was worth a 5 for me-- the whole thing was pretty good, there were a few things previously mentioned like the photography and spelling, but otherwise, I enjoyed reading this.
(total: [4+4+4+4+5]/5=
4.2)