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Fuss About a Bus - Turn 0 [HH Winner 2023]

Posted: Sat Oct 14, 2023 7:37 am
by bertinator
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This is my submission for the 2023 Halloween Hellhunt. Enjoy!
This battle is part of a campaign of Heroic Escapades. Check out the campaign top thread here.


Introduction

Parked at the heart of a desolate, hidden field, a colossal war machine looms, the PartyBattleBus, a titanic relic of bygone revelry. Its mechanisms no longer roar with vibrant life, except for the speaker system - unleashing an unceasing symphony of thunderous motivational musik that reverberates through the very Earth. This strange vehicle serves as the loot in this inaugural saga of Heroic Escapades, an epic that now unfurls.
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All loot is defended. A clan of techno-bandits, who have transformed it into a citadel of awe-inspiring proportions, the likes of which they could only dream, find joy in fending off anyone who seek to steal from them.
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Elyana of Skion, the vanguard of valor, leads the charge, rallying a squadron of unwavering Skion champions to this distant world, their mission clear: depart this realm only with the PartyBattleBus as their prize.
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Skulls Mackenzie, the party trooper that led them here, yearns for the embrace of his long-lost ride. As the symphony of epic music courses through the air, he cracks open a Maniak Beer and goes straight into party mode. It's unlikely he'll make a meaningful contribution to the battle.
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A diverse fellowship of heroes, forming an alliance until Betrayal Bennies persuade them otherwise, embarks on this fateful escapade. They stand shoulder to shoulder in support for the Skion strikeforce, determined to liberate the PartyBattleBus.

At the forefront stands Dasher, an expert marksman armed with a trusty sniper rifle. He commands a band of relentless SpaceCops, bearers of "justice and stability," committed to delivering their brand of order to the realm of Cleetus McXenobutcher's farm.
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Bertinator, accompanied by a squad of unwavering Studland S.M.I.L.E. infantry, seeks not only riches but also the glory that accompanies chaos and pandemonium.
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Nervyr, lured from his distant homeworld Rehinn, heeds the call of this escapade, supported by an army of indomitable Iriorian Droplets.
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Bragallot, a master tinkerer, scored a good deal on a set of clankers. This battle serves as a canvas for his latest masterpiece, a preposterously large gun.
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But standing between the heroes and their loot is none other than Cleetus McXenobutcher, the unyielding lord of this farm. By his side, farmhands Allen Wrench, Jeremiahdediah, and Duno Harm, fiercely hostile towards intruders, yet strangely impartial towards the techno-bandits who seek refuge on their land.
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The stage is set.

Additional views of the battlefield
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Behind the farm we see Candy, short for Candra, making BrikTok videos of dancing sheep.
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Her oldest sister Sandy looks after the farmhouse while the middle sister Mandy spends most of her time in the garden.
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The farm has room for 3 horses, 3 pigs, 4 sheep, a dog and a cow. There might be a bull as well, but we're not sure. Just hope you see it before it sees you.
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A large barn with sliding doors stands at the center of Cleetus' agricultural enterprise.
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The technobandit party is invite-only.
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They mean it.
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INITIAL OVERVIEW

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Participants:
  • Elyana and Skion: played by Dienekes
  • Dasher and SpaceCops: played by Quantumsurfer
  • Bertinator and Studland: played by bertinator
  • Nervyr and Iriorians: played by Nervyr
  • Bragallot and the droids: played by Bragallot
  • AstroMike and the Technobandits: played by MadMario
  • Cleetus' gang: mob rule.

Re: Fuss About a Bus - Turn 0

Posted: Sat Oct 14, 2023 11:30 am
by ninja_bait
Ossum, love skulls mackenzie

Re: [HH23] Fuss About a Bus - Turn 0

Posted: Fri Nov 03, 2023 7:46 am
by bertinator
Never thought this entire battle would be wrapped up before HH23 ended, but it is. So I've decided to submit, with major thanks to the players for sending in their orders so fast every time.

I've updated this first post with the [HH23] tag and added links to consecutive turns for quick reference.

Re: [HH23] Fuss About a Bus - Turn 0

Posted: Sun Nov 12, 2023 11:07 am
by MadMario
Gameplay: 5
Photography: 5
Violence: 4
Writing: 5
Overall Appearance: 4


A really great battle. I´m especially impressed how the photography and writing make the action clearly arranged despite all the stuff that´s going on. Fine amount of violence, fun writing and some wtf-moments. All a great brikwars battle needs! Looking forward to the next escapades!

Re: [HH23] Fuss About a Bus - Turn 0

Posted: Mon Nov 13, 2023 1:33 am
by Valiant
Gameplay: 5
Photography: 5
Violence: 4
Writing: 5
Overall Appearance: 4


You hit it out of the park with this one!

Outstanding gameplay - this looks like it was a fun map to build.

Alright, I'm going to go off 8)
Your photography is excellent, and this is why :rtfm:

You know how to frame a shot. There is no unnecessary clutter in your frame. You have the map elevated on a table, which enables you to pull off a number of camera angles. You know when to use a wide FOV, and a shallow FOV. You have good lighting! Ah... I could go on :D

In short, well done. Good photography clearly communicates what is going on, and keeps me engaged with the story. I didn't feel disengaged or bored once while reading your BR. That takes skill, and it takes time to hone that skill.

So, for all of y'all wondering how to make better content for BrikWars (or any platform that uses photography or video), take notes from Bertinator here.

Now, back to the criteria.

The violence was excellent, but not outstanding. The writing was spot-on.
Overall appearance... my guy, you only had one pumpkin. The best pumpkin, a spooky pumpkin, an epic pumpkin!
But, it was one pumpkin. That'll have to be a four. :cry:

Well done Bertinator. I hope you win!

Re: [HH23] Fuss About a Bus - Turn 0

Posted: Fri Nov 17, 2023 2:09 pm
by The PumpKing
Gameplay: 4
Photography: 5
Violence: 5
Writing: 4
Overall Appeal: 3

Yeah, what everyone else said! Love the continuity this has the potential for. That PartyBattleBus also fucking ROCKS.