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Hey guys, I've started writing a book! https://docs.google.com/document/d/1yri ... sp=sharing

feedback?

Okay, here's what I think:

6. Too many run-on sentences. Try to limit one thought to one sentence and reserve run-on sentences for when you need them. Otherwise it's just a mess.

7. These chapters are really short. I don't even really think you need to have different chapters until maybe chapter 5.

8. I think we've been over this before, but the name Ching Chong Wong Bong is racist.

9. The content is good, and the humour is really unique and good. Parts of it are like reading an acid trip. I really like the ridiculousness of it all, and I would read more if you keep writing.