The Pristine Commonwealth

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The Pristine Commonwealth

Post by MadMario » Fri Apr 24, 2020 5:16 pm

Prologue Part I

*generic news jingle playing*

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"Good evening! I´m Anne Chorman and this is Brode Kaast, and you´re watching Henndirro News Network with a special report of the upcoming treaty negotiations between the Ulrion Protectorate and StarCorp. LLC!"




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"As you may remember, the stricken Ulrion Commonwealth last year joined the M-Throne Empire as a vasall state, and hoped to end the crisis with the help of the new government and supplies. And while most problems in the core systems were solved quickly, some of the remote and less developed systems were not happy with their new liege lords from the beginning."




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"That´s right, Anne, the rumour mill speaks of an organized group that wants to liberate the protectorate from imperial jurisdiction, yet nothing more than some demonstrations and filed applications were reported. Nevertheless the negotiations will take place in Ulrion Prime´s embassy district with the highest safety precautions. And right there, Hugh Hadlines is talking to some of the ambassadors before the talkings start later this evening."




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"Yes! I´m standing here with Quinton McKinley, the Home Secretary of Ulrion Prime, and Diego Barrick, Ambassador of StarCorp. LLC! While the chief negotiator of the M-Throne Empire will arrive later this evening, these two are already laying the foundations for the upcoming talks, am I right, Mr. McKinley?"




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McKinley: "That´s correct. Mr. Barrick and I already worked together before the Protectorate was established. Negotiations with StarCorp. were disrupted by these events, that´s why I´m more than delighted that these negotiations will be resumed now."




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"That´s great to hear. Especially regarding the adverse conditions before the establishment of the Protectorate. Mr. Barrick, how did StarCorp. react, when Ulrion decided to ask for help from an Empire they hardly knew instead of their long-term commercial partners?"




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Diego Barrick: "It was a well-considered decision of the Ulrion politicians to ask the Empire for help. StarCorp. is not entitled to doubt this decision, nor do we bear a grudge against it."




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"Great! And now we just wait until the Ambassador of the M-Throne Empire - Mr. Wilhelm Sternreiser - returns from the talkings with his superiors and the negotiations can start. as you can see, the district is peppered with personnell of the protectorate army. The highest military presence this quarter has ever seen."




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"It´s more than unlikely that anything will disturb the upcoming talks, as everything here is peaceful and quiet."




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KA-BOOM!




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Re: The Pristine Commonwealth

Post by Food_Truk » Fri Apr 24, 2020 5:19 pm

Nice dramatic ending shot, loving the whole news broadcast vibe.
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Post by Kaplan » Sat Apr 25, 2020 3:01 am

This is amazing as always.
As I said before I really liked the design of the TV-Studio.

The Protectorate Soldiers with Ultrion armors yet M-Throne color uniforms and logo on them are awesome too!

I also liked how you showed us that the scuba diver sneaked under the building :)

The explosion effect is also incredible!

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Post by MadMario » Sat Apr 25, 2020 4:21 pm

Prologue Part II

*static noise*

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kzzzzt....krch... "What you just saw was real. And it was just the beginning."




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"The embassy of StarCorp. LLC has fallen. It was weak. Just as StarCorp. itself. They didn´t have the guts to help the old Commonwealth. They did focus on their own business. And that´s what they now should maintain!" ...trzzpt




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frzz.. kchh... "The Commonwealth submitted to the M-Throne Empire without acceptance from us, the people. We have risen against the Commonwealth leaders because they were corrupt and incapable. They were replaced by Imperial officers. Nothing changed for us. So now we rise against the Empire, and everyone who is willing to support them!"




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brztt... "You think we are a fistful of insurgents. You are so wrong. We are the ones whose efforts helped the Commonwealth to grow strong and prosper in the past. And our efforts will bring it back to the glory days once more. We are shadow. We are light. We are many. We are the forces of..."




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"...the Pristine Commonwealth!"

"And our troops are standing right before the capital, ready to expel those imperial ba...."

"Frank, honey! Come upstairs, dinner´s ready!"




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"JEEZ, HELEN! I TOLD YOU I`M WORKIN` AND DON`T WANNA BE DISTURBED!" ..frzt... "damn, how do I turn off that th.." ...KRCHZT!




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*static noise*


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Post by Spectral » Sat Apr 25, 2020 4:28 pm

Dude this is gold
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Fantastic FX all around. :tiger:

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can I steal that "please stand by" image for my stream?
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Re: The Pristine Commonwealth

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ninja_bait wrote:
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can I steal that "please stand by" image for my stream?
Sure, go ahead. :D
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Post by Kaplan » Sun Apr 26, 2020 2:28 am

Very nice!

I like the funny suprise ending :)

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Post by MadMario » Wed Apr 29, 2020 5:46 am

Chapter I, Part I


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Directly after the explosion at the StarCorp. LLC embassy, Quinton McKinley and Diego Barrick were escorted to the strong guarded parliament building, where they are now medically treated and try to get a general idea of what happened.

M-Throne Medic: "Seems you are both okay, just a few scratches from falling down the stairs, but nothing worrying."

McKinley: "Thanks, Officer. Dismissed."




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As the M-Throne Medics pack their stuff, McKinley and Barrick take a look at a strategic Holomap, where the activities around the capital, the spacedocks and the embassy district can be seen.

"That guy on the pirate transmission didn´t lie. There are numerous signs of military troops and vehicles approaching the city borders. They´ll reach the landing bays in about three hours. I bet their plan is to capture the docks to cut us off from supplies and reinforcements."




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Barrick: "Well, you have military presence around, right? How many Protectorate troops are there?"


"Not approximately enough to deal with what´s coming there. It´s a security team, not a military force.
Some combat hoverbikes, two medium tanks. Rather for representing purposes. The city itself is not classed as high security level, for we are already surrounded by highly secured military stations. Never thought that the enemy could come from within..."





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For a moment, both of them stand there in silence, pondering options in their head.

"Okay. The StarCorps battlefleet "Horizon" is currently positioned in a nearby system. If General Welfare allows me to temporarily take command of it, they can use the nearest G.A.T.E. and be here in one or two hours."

"That´s great. Any kind of support is highly welcome right now. I will promptly contact Sternreiser. He should be on Fernstab making last precautions for the negotiations. Those will have to wait of course. I´ll ask if he can bring military and financial support with him."




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"Good, I´ll meet with my entourage at Dock 13 and contact StarCorps HQ. Send all your Protectorate forces there, we´ll establish a barricade around the docks. They´ll not get them easily."

"I´ll order all available forces to get there. If Sternreiser takes the nearest Warpgate and brings troops with him, they will most likely land at the docks, too. But I can´t say if they´ll be there in time."

"Well then, old friend. We´ll meet at Dock 13 when all preparations were made."




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"So be it!"

Barrick rushes out of the office, heading straight to the docks where some StarCorps soldiers are waiting.

"Comm-Droid: contact Fernstab embassy, Wilhelm Sternreiser, encrypted transmission, priority level one!"




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Chapter I, Part II

Nehellenium Galaxy, Ferstab Colony, Embassy building of the M-Throne Empire.

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Wilhelm Sternreiser, M-Throne Ambassador in the Henndirro Galaxy: "...and that is everything that happened since you left Ulrion last year. The Protectorate is flourishing, and only very few people, including some of the military forces, still seem to have doubts about the Empire´s influence. But I already have taken measures to deal with these minor tasks."

LordSigmund Weisswelt, M-Throne Ambassador in the Nehellenium Galaxy: "Excellent work, Ambassador Sternreiser. I knew it was the right choice to put you in this position. And with all the initial turmoils straightened, the negotiations with StarCorps and the other factions of the Henndirro Galaxy will finally proceed. Soon they will all learn the advantages of serving The Greater Good."

"Thank you for your trust, My lord. I nearly finished preparations to return to Ulrion for the negotiations with the StarCorps Ambassador. As soon as my ship is ready, I´ll.."




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Suddenly a servant walks up to the Ambassadors.

Servant: "Lord Weisswelt, sorry to disturb, but your meeting is about to begin, and the other Generals await your presence soon."

"Right. Tell them I´ll be there in a minute."

"As you wish, Sir."




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"Well, as long as your ship isn´t ready, why don´t you come with me to the meeting?"

"Oh, but I think this meeting is only for the highest ranking members..."

"...to whom you also count, Ambassador. After all you represent a whole new galaxy. A small one, yes, but nevertheless. I insist that you attend me."




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Sternreiser takes a deep bow.

"I´m feeling honored, My lord. And of course I will comply with your request."




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A few minutes later they are already in the midst of talking. In the meeting room, high ranking officers gathered around a 3D-strategic-space-map table. They are looking at an ice-planet – lava planet dual system.

"So Admiral Axisson. You have heard Lord Warcan’s proposal. Do you think its a viable plan?"




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Admiral Axisson: "Yes, Sir. Ending the warp-jump right behind the lava planet will make our fleet undetectable from any ground sensors on the ice-planet. Unless they have put spy satellites around the planets."

General Luger: "Very unlikely. Our long range scanners could not detect any satellites nearby."




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"I believe Lord Warcans idea of making the jump behind the lava planet could lead to a surprise attack, and it will be advantageous for sure."

All officers nod approvingly.




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"We can execute the plan if you don´t want to add anything else, Lord Warcan."

Lord Warcan: "My Lord, I would suggest to order the Battlecruisers that are closest to the system to intensively scan the entire system once more before we calculate the jump coordinates."

"Good. We will order them to do so."




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Another servant enters the room. He´s obviously been in a hurry. Peoples attention and faces are diverted to him.

"My Lord, we have an urgent Holocall from Commander McKinley of Ulrion Prime. Highest priority. He needs to talk to Ambassador Sternreiser immediately!"

"Well, we are done with the meeting right now. We can answer the call from this room. Bring the Comm-Droid here."



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while the other officers start murmuring and the Holotable is turned off, Weisswelt directly addresses Sternreiser.

"I think it´s okay to take the call here. It´s the fastest way."

"Of course. There´s no secrets on Ulrion. Nothing that the other officers didn´t need to hear."




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The Comm-Droid arrives, and immediately the holographic picture of McKinley appears on-screen. He seems a bit surprised that other officers and Weisswelt are around, but quickly gathers himself.

"Ambassador Sternreiser, Lord Weisswelt, sorry to disturb you, but we have a serious problem here on Ulrion Prime."

Sternreiser signals Weisswelt that he may take over the talking, for he is the higher ranked Ambassador.

"Go ahead."

"There was an ambush on the StarCorps embassy building, it was completely destroyed by a bomb explosion. Some troops were injured, but the ambassador is doing well. Right after that the TV-signals were hacked and a polemic speech was broadcasted in the entire system. It seems there´s far more than a fistful of rebels out there, like we thought. They have now gathered considerable forces at the borders of the capital. They´ll reach the docks in a few hours."




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"This doesn´t sound good. And as far as I´m informed, there are not many military forces around the embassy district, am I right?"

"That is correct, Mylord. With all available forces we would not be able to withstand this threat for long. That´s why I already accepted the proposal of Ambassador Barrick from StarCorps, who offered to gather troops from nearby to assist us, just in case we don´t get own reinforcements here in time."

"A delicate decision, but I guess the only reasonable one, given the situation. This can only help in further negotiations with StarCorps."




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"Okay, here´s my orders. Take all available troops and fortify the docks as good as possible. We´ll need the landing platforms to bring our reinforcements there. Sternreiser, you´ll set out to Ulrion within the next 30 minutes. I´ll take all preparations that a ship with enough troops will be ready in time. We´ll give you some valuables and money, too. Maybe these rebels can also be convinced with other methods than firepower. McKinley, you prepare the docks for the arrival of our ships, and defend them at all costs."

"Yes, My lord! I´ll start preparations immediately!"




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Weisswelt senses fear in McKinley´s voice, so he tries to reassure him.

"Commander, be confident. We have reinforcements by your side in no time. Everyone here in this room is always ready to fight for the greater good, anywhere in the Brikverse, anytime. We won´t leave Ulrion out in the rain."

"Yes, Sir. I know that. And thank you."

The transmission ends, and the Comm-droid slowly walks off.




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"One more thing before you go, Ambassador. Take an experienced Commander with you, who takes control of the Protectorate forces. I just feel that it would be better for the morale and integrity of the troops right now if they are led by someone who exemplifies our imperial values."

"Yes, Mylord. I already have the perfect one in mind. If I hurry, we can meet right before the ship is leaving."

"Excellent. Dismissed. For The Greater Good!"

"For The Greater Good!"


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Post by MadMario » Fri May 01, 2020 3:19 am

Chapter I, Part III


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Meanwhile, back on Ulrion Prime, Ambassador Barrick headed straight to landing pad 13. On the way from the parliament building, he met with the captain of his entourage - Trenton Porter - and some soldiers. Protectorate Troops are rushing besides them, as they were ordered to secure the docks.

Porter: "The Comm-Array will be ready any second."




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Barrick: "Good work, Captain. Indeed, this whole situation is weird, but it´s also a great chance for us to give proof of our strength and reliability, to the people of Ulrion as well as to the M-Throne Empire."

"You think that´ll give you advantages in the negotiations?"

"Oh, I´m not up to getting advantages from this. I rather hope that the Empire will accept us as an equal partner after this, and not see us as another business partner. That´s what Deele never understood. It´s not always money that´s the greatest value. In dire straits like these, it´s the acts that define you."




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The Comm-Array makes a sizzling noise, and almost instantly General Welfare appears on the screen.

Welfare: "Ambassador, I just heard about an explosion at the embassy. Good to see you´re alright. What can I do for you?"

"General, I need troop support immediately. I know that Battlefleet Horizon is nearby, and that they could send dropships on short call. I just need your permission to make these request."

"Wait, you want to call in dropships to a neutral planet we plan to make negotiations with? Do you think that´s a good decision?"

"I´ll explain details later. Short version is: Enemy forces have gathered at the city, nothing the Protectorate could keep up with. Imperial reinforcements are on the way, but we don´t know if they´ll make it in time. So we would be the fastest response."




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Welfare thinks for a moment.

"I see. That seems like a calculated risk, and of course we will help the Protectorate. I´ll contact the battlefleet myself. You´ll get the troops in no time. Good luck down there!"

"Thank you, General. I´ll send coordinates of the landing zones. Over."




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"This is good news, Ambassador. I´ll let my men prepare the landing pads for the dropships immediately."

"Foresighted as always, Porter. Make it so. I only hope they´ll arrive soon enough..."

"May I make a suggestion, Sir?"

"Go ahead."

"What about your brother? I heard he´s nearby?"

"He is indeed. Gosh, I didn´t even think about that. Great idea, Porter. Call him at once."




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The Comm-Array sizzles once more and a man in mercenary uniform appears on the screen.

"Vance, brother! Remember that favor from a while ago? Well, I think now it´s time to reciprocate. How fast can your chapter be on Ulrion Prime?"

Vance Barrick, leader of the I.M.A. Henndirro chapter: "For you, brother? Almost there. See you in a minute."


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Chapter I, Part IV


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In the Fernstab Colony embassy building, Ambassador Sternreiser meets with Commander Mila Gutenhimmel shortly before the ship to Ulrion is ready to start.

Mila Gutenhimmel: "Good day, Commander Sternreiser. You wanted to see me?"

Wilhelm Sternreiser: "At ease, Commander. I have become an Ambassador, remember? I’m not your Commander anymore."

"Although you have been assigned as an Ambassador, you will always be my Commander, Sir."




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"Thank you, Commander. I have asked for you because I have an important assignment for sure."

"I’m listening, Sir."

"You will be assigned as the Supreme Commander of the Ulrion Protectorate Forces."

"Which means that by becoming part of a Vassal State Army, I have to resign from the Imperial Army."




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"Yes Mila. For The Greater Good you will. Come, walk with me. I will explain the current situation to you on the way."

They leave the impressive balcony of the embassy building and head towards the armoury.




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As they arrive at the central chamber of the armoury, Sternreiser stops and turns around.

"Why are we here, Sir?"

"The situation on Ulrion is critical for The Greater Good in Henndirro. M-Throne´s image as an autocratic Empire in the eyes of some rebels makes the systems resistance uncomfortable. So you have to take charge of the Protectorate-Imperial joint forces as an Ulrion army member rather than a Imperial Officer."

"I understand, Sir."




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A servant enters the room with a piece of armor that looks unfamiliar to Gutenhimmel.

"Here. Put on this Ulrion-Protectorate armor. It bears both the Imperial and the Ulrion logos on it, as the rest of the protectorate army does. This tailored piece is of the finest materials, customized for your needs.

Gutenhimmel examines the unusual piece of armor, but then puts it on eagerly.




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"Mila, I know how devoted you are to The Greater Good. I realised that you will become a successful officer when you came under my command as a young lieutenant. I watched your progress very carefully and checked your background."




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"We will be dealing with rebel forces on Ulrion. When your family was killed by rebels on your homeplanet, you were rescued by the Imperial army, and it became your family. I could not become a General myself, but I think once you prove yourself on this assignment, you may return to the Imperial forces in the rank of a General. Sometimes you have to make a sacrifice for The Greater Good to be able to serve it even better."




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"Yes, Sir. I will do everything in my power for The Greater Good."

"I know that, Mila. Now, let´s head to the ship. The reinforcements should be ready to leave!"


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