Episode 10: End of the Rebellion - Revision history

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← Older revision		Revision as of 10:46, 18 July 2019
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	'''Prince Asoto:''' Emperor Asoto. It has a nice ring to it, I guess there is a silver lining in all of this.		'''Prince Asoto:''' Emperor Asoto. It has a nice ring to it, I guess there is a silver lining in all of this.

−	~~To be continued...~~	+	Next: [[Episode 11: Distress Signal]]

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 '''Prince Asoto:''' Yes, that would be wise. Please take care of the formalities, Yoshi.
-'''Adjutant Yoshi:'' As you wish, your highness.
+'''Adjutant Yoshi:''' As you wish, your highness.
 ''Adjutant Yoshi leaves the room. Prince Asoto ponders to himself."

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 '''Commander Eegon:''' I'll take this head with me. Soldiers. Burn the body.
-Back in the Imperial palace of the Yellow Sun Capitol. Adjutant Yoshi is briefing the Prince Asoto about the incident. Prince listens to Yoshi in sadness and anger.
+''A little alter, in the Imperial palace of the Yellow Sun Capitol. Adjutant Yoshi is briefing the Prince Asoto about the incident. Prince listens to Yoshi in sadness and anger.''
 [[File:Betrayal30.jpg]]
-'''Adjutant Yoshi:'''And we have no idea how you brother got himself loose from the handcuff. Just when your father got close to him he grab a knife from nearby tand stab to the Emperor.
+'''Adjutant Yoshi:'''...and we have no idea how your brother got himself loose from the handcuff. Just when your father got close to him he grab a knife from nearby and stabed to the Emperor.
 '''Prince Asoto:''' My brother was always very talented in abilities like that. My father should be more careful. My brother was a criminal after all. How did he die?
-Asoto walks around the table talking avoiding showing his sad face from Asoto. He sounds like he is nearly gonna cry.
+Asoto walks around the table talking avoiding to show his sad face from Asoto. He sounds like he is nearly gonna cry.
 [[File:Betrayal31.jpg]]
-'''Adjutant Yoshi:'''Your highness, There is no shape in being sad about an incident like this.
+'''Adjutant Yoshi:'''Your highness, There is no shame in being sad about an incident like this.
 '''Prince Asoto:''' OK, OK. I can handle this. You tell me how my brother died.
-'''Adjutant Yoshi:''' After he killed the Emperor. He declared himself victorious against your father and disbanded all rebel-cells of him with a comm message. When our forces try to capture him. He said he would rather die than getting in jail in a remote prison-planet. He push the triger of a bomb hidden in his hand and blowed himself up.
+'''Adjutant Yoshi:''' After he killed the Emperor. He declared himself victorious against your father and disbanded all rebel-cells of him with a comm message. When M-throne forces try to capture him. He said he would rather die than getting in jail in a remote prison-planet. He push the triger of a bomb hidden in his hand and blowed himself up.
 '''Prince Asoto:''' What happened to his remains.

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 '''Prince Asoto:'''Both my father and my brother were fine warriors. They are gone now. What will happen next?
-He bows before Asoto
+''He bows before Asoto.''
-'''Adjutant Yoshi:''' Your time has began, Emperor Asoto, son of Yamatomaro. Without any rebellion on the planet, together with your allies the M-throne Empire, our nations golden age will begin. Once you marry Princess Celia, our bonds the them will ve even stonger.
+'''Adjutant Yoshi:''' Your time has began, Emperor Asoto, son of Yamatomaro. Without any rebellion on the planet, together with your allies the M-throne Empire, our nations golden age will begin. Once you marry Princess Celia, our bonds with them will be even stonger.
 '''Prince Asoto:'''You're right. I think I will be the best ruler for my nation. How is my fiancee by the way? Is she affected by the events?
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 '''Adjutant Yoshi:'''She is very sad about todays incendents. She hopes that the wedding won't be postponed. I recommend not to make her even more sad.
-'''Prince Asoto:''' Agreed. Continue with the preperations as planned but the common people won't be attending the wedding. I don't need any whiny people in my wedding.
+'''Prince Asoto:''' Agreed. Continue with the preperations as planned but the common people won't be attending the wedding. I don't need any sad, whiny people in my wedding.
 '''Adjutant Yoshi:'' Understood my Emperor. I also recommend that your official coronation have to take place as soon as possible.
-'''Prince Asoto:''' Take care with the formalities about that Yoshi.
+'''Prince Asoto:''' Take care with the formalities about that, Yoshi.
 '''Adjutant Yoshi:'' As you wish, your highness.

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	[[File:Betrayal28.jpg]]		[[File:Betrayal28.jpg]]

		+	''Commander Eegon takes the detached head from the ground.''

		+	[[File:Betrayal29.jpg]]

		+	'''Commander Eegon:''' I'll take this head with me. Soldiers. Burn the body.

		+	Back in the Imperial palace of the Yellow Sun Capitol. Adjutant Yoshi is briefing the Prince Asoto about the incident. Prince listens to Yoshi in sadness and anger.

		+	[[File:Betrayal30.jpg]]

		+	'''Adjutant Yoshi:'''And we have no idea how you brother got himself loose from the handcuff. Just when your father got close to him he grab a knife from nearby tand stab to the Emperor.

		+	'''Prince Asoto:''' My brother was always very talented in abilities like that. My father should be more careful. My brother was a criminal after all. How did he die?

		+	Asoto walks around the table talking avoiding showing his sad face from Asoto. He sounds like he is nearly gonna cry.

		+	[[File:Betrayal31.jpg]]

		+	'''Adjutant Yoshi:'''Your highness, There is no shape in being sad about an incident like this.

		+	'''Prince Asoto:''' OK, OK. I can handle this. You tell me how my brother died.

		+	'''Adjutant Yoshi:''' After he killed the Emperor. He declared himself victorious against your father and disbanded all rebel-cells of him with a comm message. When our forces try to capture him. He said he would rather die than getting in jail in a remote prison-planet. He push the triger of a bomb hidden in his hand and blowed himself up.

		+	'''Prince Asoto:''' What happened to his remains.

		+	'''Adjutant Yoshi:''' His remains are completely burned your highness.

		+	[[File:Betrayal32.jpg]]

		+	'''Prince Asoto:'''Both my father and my brother were fine warriors. They are gone now. What will happen next?

		+	He bows before Asoto

		+	'''Adjutant Yoshi:''' Your time has began, Emperor Asoto, son of Yamatomaro. Without any rebellion on the planet, together with your allies the M-throne Empire, our nations golden age will begin. Once you marry Princess Celia, our bonds the them will ve even stonger.

		+	'''Prince Asoto:'''You're right. I think I will be the best ruler for my nation. How is my fiancee by the way? Is she affected by the events?

		+	'''Adjutant Yoshi:'''She is very sad about todays incendents. She hopes that the wedding won't be postponed. I recommend not to make her even more sad.

		+	'''Prince Asoto:''' Agreed. Continue with the preperations as planned but the common people won't be attending the wedding. I don't need any whiny people in my wedding.
		+
		+	'''Adjutant Yoshi:'' Understood my Emperor. I also recommend that your official coronation have to take place as soon as possible.
		+
		+	'''Prince Asoto:''' Take care with the formalities about that Yoshi.
		+
		+	'''Adjutant Yoshi:'' As you wish, your highness.
		+
		+	''Adjutant Yoshi leaves the room. Prince Asoto talks to himself quietly."
		+
		+	[[File:Betrayal33.jpg]]
		+
		+	'''Prince Asoto:''' Emperor Asoto. It has a nice ring to it. Today wasn't that bad after all.

	To be continued...		To be continued...

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 ''Yumatos head separated from his body while blood covering around his dead body.''
-'''Commander Eegon:'''
+'''Commander Eegon:''' And this is your punishment for betraying your own father. Noone should betray his father even he is the most evil in the universe.
-[[File:Betrayal27.png]]
+[[File:Betrayal28.jpg]]

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 ''Old commander talks to himself quietly''
-'''Commander Eegon:''' What a beautiful planet is this. Maybe I can settle in on this planet after I retire. Maybe the Emperor reward me with some land if a become succesful in my mission."
+'''Commander Eegon:''' What a beautiful planet is this. Maybe I can settle in on this planet after I retire. Maybe the Emperor reward me with some land if a become succesful in my mission.
 [[File:Betrayal01.jpg]]
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 [[File:Betrayal27.png]]

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 '''Commander Eegon:''' Proceed as you told.
-''Emperor Yamatomaro shouts loud andfuriously.''
+''Emperor Yamatomaro shouts loud and furiously.''
 '''Emperor Yamatomaro:''' What are you waiting for? Kill him now.
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 '''Yumato:''' I think you miscalculated something. Father.
-''In the blink of an eye. Adjutant Yoshi turned to Emperor and sticked the sword into his body.''
+''In the blink of an eye. Adjutant Yoshi turned to the Emperor and sticked the sword into his body.''
 [[File:Betrayal17.jpg]]
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 '''Emperor Yamatomaro:''' Yoshi...  What have I done to you to deserve this?'''
-'''Adjutant Yoshi:''' You have so much faults to count right now Yamatomaro. Don't resist your fate. Let the spirit go free.
+'''Adjutant Yoshi:''' You have so much faults to count right now Yamatomaro. Don't resist your fate. Let your spirit go free off your body.
 [[File:Betrayal19.jpg]]
-'''Commander Eegon:''' Yamatomaro. Did you really think that we won't be able to find out what you put into your sword you gave as a gift?
+'''Commander Eegon:''' Yamatomaro. Did you really think that we won't be able to find out what you put into the sword you gave as a gift?
 [[File:Betrayal20.jpg]]
 '''Commander Eegon:''' Doctor. Come here an check out Yamatomaro. Make sure he is fully dead. Then, take the body out of here.
 '''Commander Eegon:''' Soldiers, lower your weapons.

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	''The soldier pushed the button of a detonator that activates a small bomb installed inside the comm-device in the hand of Yumato blowing his hand and head off.		''The soldier pushed the button of a detonator that activates a small bomb installed inside the comm-device in the hand of Yumato blowing his hand and head off.

−	[[File:Betrayal27.~~jpg~~]]	+	[[File:Betrayal27.png]]