Episode 11: Distress Signal - Revision history

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Previously: [[Episode 10: End of the Rebellion]]

''Some time after the end of the rebellion in Yellow Sun Empire in the Nehellium galaxy, an Imperial Turbino class starship was patroling in an area called as the Rusky Sector by the M-thronians. ''

[[File:dist001.jpg]]

''Captain Balabeg Ahmedov was sitting in his large red captain chair reading boring reports from the officers under his command, thinking how he ended up in this peaceful region the galaxy. ''

[[File:dist002.jpg]]

'''Communications Officer''': Captain. We are receiving a distress call from a deep space beacon located at north eastern section of the Rusky Sector.

[[File:dist003.jpg]]

'''Captain Balabeg Ahmedov''': Commander. Activate the deep space sensors.

[[File:dist004.jpg]]

'''Commander''': Sensors activated Captain. A fleet consistings multiple capital ships with unidentifed designs entered the Rusky Sector.

'''Captain Ahmedov''': Unidentified? Hmm. Let me see this fleet. Put the sensor images on the main screen.

[[File:dist005.jpg]]

'''Captain Ahmedov''': Hmm. No wonder that the ship computer cant identify the designs. These ships looks like they are made of scrap metal and garbage. They are probably built by greenskins. Trace their trajectory and find their targets.

'''Commander''': They are heading to Dracosius system. Dracosius system is under rule autonomus state with close relations to the empire. According to the imperial database an imperial embassy, small scale military base are located on the Dracosius Prime, third planet close to the star. Since they are not a space-faring civilization no space defences are available.

[[File:dist006.jpg]]

'''Captain Ahmedov''': I know that system commander. Cantact the highest ranking military personnel on Dracosius Prime.

'''Communications Officer''': We are contacting Captain Tiana Vanshikin. She is the commanding officer of the military base and security forces of the embassy.

'''Captain Ahmedov''': Good. Put her on main screen when connection established.

''The connection with the Dracosius prime is established and Officer Tiana Vanshikin appers on the main screen.''

[[File:dist007.jpg]]

''Captain Tiana Vanshikin''': Greetings Captain Ahmedov.

'''Captain Ahmedov''': Greetings Captain Vanshikin.

[[File:dist008.jpg]]

'''Captain Ahmedov''': There is a fleet of unidentified origin, probably greenskins are on the way to your planet. If they are indeed greenskins their intentions would be hostile. I recommend you to warn the local authorities and to take defensives measures immediately.

[[File:dist009.jpg]]

'''Captain Tiana Vanshikin''': We will do as you say C..ptain. A lot of int..ference ….. in the transmision. We’ll be wa… f…. the reinforcements. Ple..s.. co..ta…. F..r…st….. a.d c…. .or r..in.o............. …

'''Captain Ahmedov''': Captain Tiana… Can you hear us?

'''Communications Officer''': We have lost the connection sir. The transmision is blocked.

''Understanding that the incoming fleet intercepts the transmition and blocks communications with the planet which could mean only one thing that they are hostile. Captain Ahmedov stands up concerned and give orders with a loud voice. ''

[[File:dist010.jpg]]

'''Captain Ahmedov''': Change course to the Dracosius system. Inform all ships in the Rusky Sector and the Ferstab about the hostile fleet. Send all the sensor data we have collected.

'''Communications Officer''': Yes. Sir.

''On planet Ferstab, Lord Sigmund Weisswelt was returning from a diplomatic mission back to the Empire's embassy building. He saw Ambassador Ilian Smyrnov' waiting for him concerned. ''

[[File:dist011.jpg]]

''Ambassador bows before Weisswelt welcoming him back''

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'''Ambassador Smyrnov''': Welcome back to Ferstab, my Lord.

'''Lord Sigmund Weisswelt''': Thank you Ambassador. You are looking concerned. What is the matter?

[[File:dist013.jpg]]

'''Ambassador Smyrnov''': My Lord. We have a message from Rusky Sector. A hostile space fleet entered the region and targeted the Dracosius system.

'''Lord Sigmund Weisswelt''': To whom belongs this fleet?

'''Ambassador Smyrnov''': According to the sensor data, the ships looks like to be made by geenskins.

[[File:dist014.jpg]]

'''Lord Sigmund Weisswelt''': We have dealt quite much with them in Tharcan Galaxy. It is really not usual to see them in Nehellium especially in a remote section of it as Rusky Sector. Is there any news from Tharcan about greenskin activity?

'''Ambassador Smyrnov''': No my Lord. There is no activity of greenskins in Tharcan as we know off.

'''Lord Sigmund Weisswelt''': This could be isolated incident or it could be the beginnig of a new greenskin invasion. We should alert all the allies, vassal states and colonies in Nehellium.

'''Ambassador Smyrnov''': As you wish sir.

[[File:dist015.jpg]]

'''Lord Sigmund Weisswelt''': Let’s go inside. I will talk about the subject with my officers . No time to waste. Reinforcements should be sent immediately. 41th fleet is coming from Tharcan through the Warpgate. Route the fleet directly to Dracosius system. The fleet consist more than enough force to defend the entire Rusky sector.

'''Ambassador Smyrnov''': Yes, My lord.

Next: [[Episode 12: Danger on Dracosius Prime]]

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-''Captain Tiana Vanshikin''': Greetings Captain Ahmedov.
+'''Captain Tiana Vanshikin''': Greetings Captain Ahmedov.
 '''Captain Ahmedov''': Greetings Captain Vanshikin.

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	'''Ambassador Smyrnov''': Yes, My lord.		'''Ambassador Smyrnov''': Yes, My lord.

−	Next: [[Episode 12: ~~Danger~~ on Dracosius Prime]]	+	Next: [[Episode 12: Necessary Alliance on Dracosius Prime]]

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 [[File:dist0001.jpg]]
-''Captain Balabeg Ahmedov was sitting in his large red captain chair,  reading boring reports from the officers under his command and thinking about how he ended up in this peaceful region the galaxy. ''
+''Captain Balabeg Ahmedov was sitting in his large red captain chair,  reading boring reports from the officers under his command and thinking about how he ended up in this peaceful region of the galaxy. ''
 [[File:dist002.jpg]]

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 Previously: [[Episode 10: End of the Rebellion]]
-''Some time after the end of the rebellion in Yellow Sun Empire in the Nehellium galaxy, an Imperial Turbino class starship was patroling in an area called as the Rusky Sector by the M-thronians. ''
+''Some time after the end of the rebellion inside the Yellow Sun Empire in the Nehellium galaxy, an Imperial Turbino class starship was patrolling in an area called as the Rusky Sector by the M-Thronians. ''
 [[File:dist0001.jpg]]
-''Captain Balabeg Ahmedov was sitting in his large red captain chair reading boring reports from the officers under his command, thinking how he ended up in this peaceful region the galaxy. ''
+''Captain Balabeg Ahmedov was sitting in his large red captain chair,  reading boring reports from the officers under his command and thinking about how he ended up in this peaceful region the galaxy. ''
 [[File:dist002.jpg]]
@@ Line 17: / Line 17: @@
 [[File:dist004.jpg]]
-'''Commander''': Sensors activated Captain. A fleet consistings multiple capital ships with unidentifed designs entered the Rusky Sector.
+'''Commander''': Sensors activated Captain. A fleet consisting of multiple capital ships of unidentified design entered the Rusky Sector.
-'''Captain Ahmedov''': Unidentified? Hmm. Let me see this fleet. Put the sensor images on the main screen.
+'''Captain Ahmedov''': Unidentified? Hmm. Let me take a look at this fleet. Put the sensor images on the main screen.
 [[File:dist005.png]]
-'''Captain Ahmedov''': Hmm. No wonder that the ship computer cant identify the designs. These ships looks like they are made of scrap metal and garbage. They are probably built by greenskins. Trace their trajectory and find their targets.
+'''Captain Ahmedov''': Hmm. No wonder the board computer can't identify the designs. These ships looks like they were made of scrap metal and garbage. They are probably built by greenskins. Trace their trajectory and find their targets.
-'''Commander''': They are heading to Dracosius system. Dracosius system is under rule autonomus state with close relations to the empire. According to the imperial database an imperial embassy, small scale military base are located on the Dracosius Prime, third planet close to the star. Since they are not a space-faring civilization no space defences are available.
+'''Commander''': They are heading to Dracosius system, which is under rule of an autonomous state with close relations to the Empire. According to the Imperial database, an Imperial embassy and small scale military base are located on Dracosius Prime, the third closest planet to the star itself. Since they are not a space-faring civilisation no space defences are present.
 [[File:dist006.jpg]]
-'''Captain Ahmedov''': I know that system commander. Cantact the highest ranking military personnel on Dracosius Prime.
+'''Captain Ahmedov''': I know that system, commander. Contact the highest ranking military personnel on Dracosius Prime.
-'''Communications Officer''': We are contacting Captain Tiana Vanshikin. She is the commanding officer of the military base and security forces of the embassy.
+'''Communications Officer''': We are contacting Captain Tiana Vanshikin. She is the commanding officer of the military base and security force of the embassy.
-'''Captain Ahmedov''': Good. Put her on main screen when connection established.
+'''Captain Ahmedov''': Good. Put her on the main screen as soon as we established a connection.
-''The connection with the Dracosius prime is established and Officer Tiana Vanshikin appers on the main screen.''
+''The connection with Dracosius Prime is established and Officer Tiana Vanshikin appears on the main screen.''
 [[File:dist007.png]]
@@ Line 45: / Line 45: @@
 [[File:dist008.jpg]]
-'''Captain Ahmedov''':  There is a fleet of unidentified origin, probably greenskins are on the way to your planet. If they are indeed greenskins their intentions would be hostile. I recommend you to warn the local authorities and to take defensives measures immediately.
+'''Captain Ahmedov''':  There is a fleet of unidentified origin, probably greenskins, on the way to your planet. If they are indeed greenskins, their intentions would be hostile. I recommend you to warn the local authorities and take defensive measures immediately.
 [[File:dist009.png]]
@@ Line 53: / Line 53: @@
 '''Captain Ahmedov''': Captain Tiana… Can you hear us?
-'''Communications Officer''': We have lost the connection sir. The transmision is blocked.
+'''Communications Officer''': We have lost the connection, sir. The transmission is blocked.
-''Understanding that the incoming fleet intercepts the transmition and blocks communications with the planet which could mean only one thing that they are hostile. Captain Ahmedov stands up concerned and give orders with a loud voice. ''
+''Understanding that the incoming fleet is interfering with the transmission and jamming communications with the planet, this could only mean that the incoming fleet was indeed hostile. The concerned Captain Ahmedov stands up and gives orders with a loud voice. ''
 [[File:dist010.jpg]]
-'''Captain Ahmedov''': Change course to the Dracosius system. Inform all ships in the Rusky Sector and the Ferstab about the hostile fleet. Send all the sensor data we have collected.
+'''Captain Ahmedov''': Change course to the Dracosius system. Inform all ships in the Rusky Sector and the Ferstab about the hostile fleet. Send all the sensor data, we have collected.
 '''Communications Officer''': Yes. Sir.
-''On planet Ferstab, Lord Sigmund Weisswelt was returning from a diplomatic mission back to the  Empire's embassy building. He saw Ambassador Ilian Smyrnov' waiting for him concerned. ''
+''On planet Ferstab, Lord Sigmund Weisswelt has returning from a diplomatic mission back to the Imperial embassy. He saw Ambassador Ilian Smyrnov, waiting for him. ''
 [[File:dist011.jpg]]
-''Ambassador bows before Weisswelt welcoming him back''
+''Ambassador bows before Weisswelt, welcoming him back''
 [[File:dist012.jpg]]
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 '''Ambassador Smyrnov''': My Lord. We have a message from Rusky Sector. A hostile space fleet entered the region and targeted the Dracosius system.
-'''Lord Sigmund Weisswelt''': To whom belongs this fleet?
+'''Lord Sigmund Weisswelt''': To whom does this fleet belong?
-'''Ambassador Smyrnov''': According to the sensor data, the ships looks like to be made by geenskins.
+'''Ambassador Smyrnov''': According to the sensor data, the ships look like they were being made by greenskins.
 [[File:dist014.jpg]]
-'''Lord Sigmund Weisswelt''': We have dealt quite much with them in Tharcan Galaxy. It is really not usual to see them in Nehellium especially in a remote section of it as Rusky Sector. Is there any news from Tharcan about greenskin activity?
+'''Lord Sigmund Weisswelt''': We had to deal quite a lot with these in the Tharcan Galaxy. It is really not usual to see them in a remote sector of the Nehellium, such as the Rusky Sector. Are there any more news from Tharcan about greenskin activity?
-'''Ambassador Smyrnov''': No my Lord. There is no activity of greenskins in Tharcan as we know off.
+'''Ambassador Smyrnov''': No my Lord. There is no activity of greenskins in Tharcan that we know off.
-'''Lord Sigmund Weisswelt''': This could be isolated incident  or it could be the beginnig of a new greenskin invasion. We should alert all the allies, vassal states and colonies in Nehellium.
+'''Lord Sigmund Weisswelt''': This could either be an isolated incident or the beginning of a new greenskin invasion. We should alert all the allies, vassal states and colonies in Nehellium.
 '''Ambassador Smyrnov''': As you wish sir.
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 [[File:dist015.jpg]]
-'''Lord Sigmund Weisswelt''': Let’s go inside. I will talk about  the subject with  my officers . No time to waste. Reinforcements should be sent immediately. 41th fleet is coming from Tharcan through the Warpgate. Route the fleet directly to Dracosius system. The fleet consist more than enough force to defend the entire Rusky sector.
+'''Lord Sigmund Weisswelt''': Let’s go inside. I will talk about the subject with my officers. No time to waste. Reinforcements should be sent immediately. The 41th fleet is coming from Tharcan through the Warpgate. Send the fleet directly to the Dracosius system. The fleet should be more than enough to defend the entire Rusky sector.
 '''Ambassador Smyrnov''': Yes, My lord.
 Next: [[Episode 12: Danger on Dracosius Prime]]